Wednesday, September 19, 2007

E beats A? by Abby


What I like most about my writing is my details. Next time, I will work harder on my topic sentance. Overall, I feel great about my fabulous writing.
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9 comments:

  1. hector mSeptember 20, 2007 at 10:20 AM

    abby that middle part was funny

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  2. stephanie sSeptember 20, 2007 at 10:22 AM

    i like your story a lot

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  3. edith rSeptember 20, 2007 at 10:36 AM

    hey abby i like your story because it is cool

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  4. stephanie sSeptember 21, 2007 at 9:52 AM

    when i read it at home and i told my mom your story she started laughing out loud

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  5. monicatSeptember 21, 2007 at 10:08 AM

    i like the part when you said that your brother eli had a full pamper.

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  6. Jeff LewisSeptember 23, 2007 at 11:23 PM

    I could picture the whole scene because you did such a good job of creating the scene with juicy words. Your voice really comes through. This story is hilarious and you should be very proud. I want you to work on adding even more details to your writing.

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  7. tavi iSeptember 25, 2007 at 11:35 AM

    whit color is the house and a good story

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  8. AnonymousSeptember 30, 2007 at 7:52 PM

    i like your story because you put your title as the funny part it sounds funny already and because you add alot of details and
    supporting details leading up to
    your funny part.

    sincerly,
    alexis

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  9. AnonymousFebruary 8, 2008 at 11:36 AM

    it is a very funny story.

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