Thursday, December 20, 2007

The mystery bag

The best part of my essay is making up all of the stuff that is in the bag and changing the names of the teachers.

The part that still needs work is the ending because it does int have that much details.

The main thing I learned about expository writing is that it has to be about you.

Next time I write an expository assay I would like to add more details.
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8 comments:

  1. monicatDecember 21, 2007 at 10:03 AM

    my favorite part of your story is that you made up a name like ms.heinztman told you.

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  2. edith rDecember 21, 2007 at 10:05 AM

    My favorite part was when you said that the thing in the bag was a fly that had muscles

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  3. jose cDecember 21, 2007 at 10:21 AM

    Your story is funny about your teacher mr.money.

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  4. AnonymousDecember 21, 2007 at 10:27 AM

    Mr.Monkey what a funny name. Sohow did you come up with the name?

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  5. uriel.rDecember 21, 2007 at 10:40 AM

    you did good details

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  6. fernando bFebruary 8, 2008 at 11:31 AM

    I liked your story beacause it was about a fly that fliys

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  7. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2008 at 4:28 PM

    I really enjoyed your FLY Story! Did the fly drink REDBULL to fly?

    Mrs. Archuleta:)

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  8. AnonymousFebruary 21, 2008 at 4:30 PM

    Great story!

    Mrs. Archuleta

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