When I’m outside I enjoy football because I like to run. I like to play football. I like to have fun.
I started to play football with my brother. I was too scared. My brother ran to fast. My brother tackled hard. He used to play with older people.
It made me exercise. You got to run a lot. That makes you healthy. You get to be stronger. Like your leg muscle would be stronger.
I also play football to be healthy. You so you could be healthier. If you run everyday you can be healthy. To eat a lot of fruit. Like if you eat oranges and apples you could get healthy.
When I’ enjoy football. I felt happy that I knew how to play football. So it was dark so my brother said lets go home.
My favorite part of my writing is when I talk about being healthy. Next time I need to make paraghs more longer. Did you struggled when you were in fourth
grade?
Why did you put soccer if you were writing about foot ball?
ReplyDeleteWhen I read your stary it felt like if it was 1 sentence.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because it was intersting
ReplyDeleteGabriel,
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you talked about when your were a little kid and played football with your brother. My brother was always bigger than me (even though he was younger) and I was afraid of him hurting me!
Good job!
Ms. Jackson
Nice work Gabriel.
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