Yours is one of many stories about a boy running into something, cracks me up! Paul, your writing has really improved. Keep up the good work and add lots more details.
I remember one time when my brother, who was probably 9 or 10 at the time, ran into our sliding glass doors. We all thought it was hilarious but I think he was a little embarrassed and I'm sure his head must have hurt. I think my mom was smiling a little because she had told him not to run through the house and now he had to learn his lesson the hard way.
I had a friend who did that when we were kids. Except he thought he could run through it, so he kept doing it until the door broke. It became very dangerous. I enjoyed your story and could imagine being there.
What I loved about your story is that many readers will be able to identify with the "Boom". Next time you write a story about you...I would like to hear more about the setting. Good job.
Hi Paul. I really liked your funny story. I think you did a great job. I especially liked how you compared your running outside to a race car and of course I liked how you ended with a question! Mrs. Morgan
Yours is one of many stories about a boy running into something, cracks me up! Paul, your writing has really improved. Keep up the good work and add lots more details.
ReplyDeleteI remember one time when my brother, who was probably 9 or 10 at the time, ran into our sliding glass doors. We all thought it was hilarious but I think he was a little embarrassed and I'm sure his head must have hurt. I think my mom was smiling a little because she had told him not to run through the house and now he had to learn his lesson the hard way.
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ReplyDeleteI had a friend who did that when we were kids. Except he thought he could run through it, so he kept doing it until the door broke. It became very dangerous. I enjoyed your story and could imagine being there.
What I loved about your story is that many readers will be able to identify with the "Boom". Next time you write a story about you...I would like to hear more about the setting. Good job.
ReplyDeleteHi Paul. I really liked your funny story. I think you did a great job. I especially liked how you compared your running outside to a race car and of course I liked how you ended with a question!
ReplyDeleteMrs. Morgan