Wednesday, September 19, 2007

Visiting Grandparents by Isaac A.



What I like most about my writing is when I missed badly my first time playing pool.
Next time , I will work harder on putting a lot more details in my writing.
Overall,I fell awesome about my writing.
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8 comments:

  1. hector mSeptember 20, 2007 at 10:15 AM

    I like that story because you were playing pool

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  2. hector mSeptember 20, 2007 at 10:15 AM

    I like that story because you were playing pool

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  3. Erik G.September 20, 2007 at 10:19 AM

    nice funny story it is halarious hahaha!!!

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  4. abigailmSeptember 20, 2007 at 10:22 AM

    Wow funnnnnnnnnny

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  5. edith rSeptember 20, 2007 at 10:39 AM

    i like your story it is funny hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahah

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  6. AnonymousSeptember 20, 2007 at 10:49 AM

    I like the way describe your story I am imprest nice job.

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  7. monicatSeptember 21, 2007 at 10:16 AM

    i thaught that that it was really funny.

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  8. Jeff LewisSeptember 23, 2007 at 11:42 PM

    The ball just stopped dead. Very good! Your story ends really fast. Try to work on adding details that describe how you feel after you don't hit a single ball. Were you embarrassed? Did you just laugh it off? Did you cry? Add those details.

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