Thursday, December 20, 2007

Whats in that bag?????????




I think the best part of my essay is the middle.
The part that needs work is the end.
The main thing I learned about expository writing was its fun.
Next time I write an expository essay I would like to write about football.
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9 comments:

  1. ashlyn zDecember 21, 2007 at 10:06 AM

    you used a lot of details in your story.

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  2. Erik G.December 21, 2007 at 10:09 AM

    Nice job you used a lot of great details.

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  3. paul lDecember 21, 2007 at 10:10 AM

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  4. paul lDecember 21, 2007 at 10:10 AM

    The spelling is great.

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  5. monicatDecember 21, 2007 at 10:14 AM

    i think that your story has a lot of exciment.

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  6. edith rDecember 21, 2007 at 10:16 AM

    nice job u did a great job on the beginig.

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  7. hector mDecember 21, 2007 at 10:18 AM

    Quinton it was a good story but you should have more sentences.When you have a chance to read it you would know to put more sentences.The other thing is to end it with a better conclusion.

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  8. christian aDecember 21, 2007 at 10:19 AM

    Quinton your story is very exiting.

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  9. stephanie sFebruary 8, 2008 at 11:17 AM

    i think this story is funny and i like when you said that mr.lewis named his rat cotton ball.

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