I could picture the whole scene because you did such a good job of creating the scene with juicy words. Your voice really comes through. This story is hilarious and you should be very proud. I want you to work on adding even more details to your writing.
i like your story because you put your title as the funny part it sounds funny already and because you add alot of details and supporting details leading up to your funny part.
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abby that middle part was funny
i like your story a lot
hey abby i like your story because it is cool
when i read it at home and i told my mom your story she started laughing out loud
i like the part when you said that your brother eli had a full pamper.
I could picture the whole scene because you did such a good job of creating the scene with juicy words. Your voice really comes through. This story is hilarious and you should be very proud. I want you to work on adding even more details to your writing.
whit color is the house and a good story
i like your story because you put your title as the funny part it sounds funny already and because you add alot of details and
supporting details leading up to
your funny part.
sincerly,
alexis
it is a very funny story.
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