I like my writing because it is funny. If I did it over again I would improve it by doing it over again. Overall I feel happy.
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Yours is one of many stories about a boy running into something, cracks me up! Paul, your writing has really improved. Keep up the good work and add lots more details.
I remember one time when my brother, who was probably 9 or 10 at the time, ran into our sliding glass doors. We all thought it was hilarious but I think he was a little embarrassed and I'm sure his head must have hurt. I think my mom was smiling a little because she had told him not to run through the house and now he had to learn his lesson the hard way.
Paul,
I had a friend who did that when we were kids. Except he thought he could run through it, so he kept doing it until the door broke. It became very dangerous. I enjoyed your story and could imagine being there.
What I loved about your story is that many readers will be able to identify with the "Boom". Next time you write a story about you...I would like to hear more about the setting. Good job.
Hi Paul. I really liked your funny story. I think you did a great job. I especially liked how you compared your running outside to a race car and of course I liked how you ended with a question!
Mrs. Morgan
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