What I like most about my writing is when I missed badly my first time playing pool. Next time , I will work harder on putting a lot more details in my writing. Overall,I fell awesome about my writing.
The ball just stopped dead. Very good! Your story ends really fast. Try to work on adding details that describe how you feel after you don't hit a single ball. Were you embarrassed? Did you just laugh it off? Did you cry? Add those details.
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I like that story because you were playing pool
I like that story because you were playing pool
nice funny story it is halarious hahaha!!!
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I like the way describe your story I am imprest nice job.
i thaught that that it was really funny.
The ball just stopped dead. Very good! Your story ends really fast. Try to work on adding details that describe how you feel after you don't hit a single ball. Were you embarrassed? Did you just laugh it off? Did you cry? Add those details.
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