Wow that part when you scared your grandma was funny
Nice story Erik HAHAHA
i like it because when u scared your grandma she juped out of her sin
i like your story when your grandma got scared and jumped.
i like your story because you scared you grandma
Ashlyn,I like your story and the imagery. I could just see a grandmother jumping "out of her skin." That is a nice way to put it.Why did you want to scare your grandmother? Does your grandmother look around the door before coming in now? Do you like to scare other people?Good paper.
"Jumped out of her skin" really helps us understand how scared she was. At the end you say, "you should have been there". Remember, your job as a writer is to help the reader think they are actually there.
i like your story because you scared your granma and she almost peed her pants
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Wow that part when you scared your grandma was funny
Nice story Erik HAHAHA
i like it because when u scared your grandma she juped out of her sin
i like your story when your grandma got scared and jumped.
i like your story because you scared you grandma
Ashlyn,
I like your story and the imagery. I could just see a grandmother jumping "out of her skin." That is a nice way to put it.
Why did you want to scare your grandmother? Does your grandmother look around the door before coming in now? Do you like to scare other people?
Good paper.
"Jumped out of her skin" really helps us understand how scared she was. At the end you say, "you should have been there". Remember, your job as a writer is to help the reader think they are actually there.
i like your story because you scared your granma and she almost peed her pants
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