Tuesday, February 26, 2008

Field Day by Ashlyn

I think the best thing I did is my conclusion. I struggled with my thierd paragraph. Next time I will work or my thierd paragraph.

3 comments:

stephanie w said...

I think you did a good job on your store.

stephanie w said...

I think you did a good job on your store.

Joseph Miller said...

I agree that your conclusion was well done. I also liked how you introduced the story. I think it was good that you kept the listener oriented by saying "first, second, third". I would have liked to see the pictures coordinated with the points you were making. Great story!