Thursday, December 20, 2007

The mystery bag

The best part of my essay is making up all of the stuff that is in the bag and changing the names of the teachers.

The part that still needs work is the ending because it does int have that much details.

The main thing I learned about expository writing is that it has to be about you.

Next time I write an expository assay I would like to add more details.

8 comments:

monicat said...

my favorite part of your story is that you made up a name like ms.heinztman told you.

edith r said...

My favorite part was when you said that the thing in the bag was a fly that had muscles

jose c said...

Your story is funny about your teacher mr.money.

Abby said...

Mr.Monkey what a funny name. Sohow did you come up with the name?

uriel.r said...

you did good details

fernando b said...

I liked your story beacause it was about a fly that fliys

Anonymous said...

I really enjoyed your FLY Story! Did the fly drink REDBULL to fly?

Mrs. Archuleta:)

Anonymous said...

Great story!

Mrs. Archuleta