Wednesday, December 19, 2007

The Mystery Bag


1.The best part of my essay is that in the bag it is a baby puppy.

2.The part that still needs work on is the conclusion.

3.The main thing I learned about expository writing is that you can explain something.

4.Next time I write an expository essay I would like to make my essay more longer.

5 comments:

ashlyn z said...

I love the way you used a lot of details.

Anonymous said...

you have some spelling errers. but nice story?

stephanie s said...

i like your story because you have a puppy and how you added a lot of details.

Anonymous said...

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Anonymous said...

aubriana likes your store.