Wednesday, September 19, 2007

E beats A? by Abby


What I like most about my writing is my details. Next time, I will work harder on my topic sentance. Overall, I feel great about my fabulous writing.

9 comments:

hector m said...

abby that middle part was funny

stephanie s said...

i like your story a lot

edith r said...

hey abby i like your story because it is cool

stephanie s said...

when i read it at home and i told my mom your story she started laughing out loud

monicat said...

i like the part when you said that your brother eli had a full pamper.

Jeff Lewis said...

I could picture the whole scene because you did such a good job of creating the scene with juicy words. Your voice really comes through. This story is hilarious and you should be very proud. I want you to work on adding even more details to your writing.

tavi i said...

whit color is the house and a good story

Anonymous said...

i like your story because you put your title as the funny part it sounds funny already and because you add alot of details and
supporting details leading up to
your funny part.

sincerly,
alexis

myth said...

it is a very funny story.