Wednesday, September 19, 2007

Visiting Grandparents by Isaac A.



What I like most about my writing is when I missed badly my first time playing pool.
Next time , I will work harder on putting a lot more details in my writing.
Overall,I fell awesome about my writing.

9 comments:

hector m said...

I like that story because you were playing pool

hector m said...

I like that story because you were playing pool

Erik G. said...

nice funny story it is halarious hahaha!!!

abigailm said...

Wow funnnnnnnnnny

edith r said...

cool

edith r said...

i like your story it is funny hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahah

Anonymous said...

I like the way describe your story I am imprest nice job.

monicat said...

i thaught that that it was really funny.

Jeff Lewis said...

The ball just stopped dead. Very good! Your story ends really fast. Try to work on adding details that describe how you feel after you don't hit a single ball. Were you embarrassed? Did you just laugh it off? Did you cry? Add those details.